Feedback for Second Cut

The feedback we received for our second cut of our trailer was positive and an overall improvement on our first cut, which is what our aim was.

In our feedback from our first cut we were told that the trailer could be improved by having a change in music, in order to make it more dramatic and create tension.  However, our feedback from our second draft suggests that the change in music was not subtle enough and that it revealed which suspect committed the crime.  For our next draft of our trailer we will try and make the transition in music a lot smoother and perhaps find some music which is less dramatic therefore not insinuating that any of the characters actually committed the crime. 

It was also said that our story line is too clear and doesn’t leave enough enigma codes.  Although the audience does not know who did it, or what happened to day they can guess what is happening and what the outcome might be.  One suggestion was to have some ‘exciting’ happen, which might throw the audience of the scent of what is happening, therefore creating another enigma code.   This for us creates the dilemma if we should re-shoot some parts or completely add something else into our plot line.  This decision we will make as a group.   Another person said that our voice over of Faye told the story too much and gave the characters too much introduction.  We again need to discuss this as a group but we will most probably decide to remove these from the trailer.

One of the improvements that we had to make from the first cut was to add text in-between some of the footage to give the audience some questions to think about and to build suspense.  Our feedback suggests that this was a good idea and the target audience likes it, however we need to think of a better way to display this text.  We currently have the text falling onto the screen however this has not proven very popular amongst our target audience.   We will re-evaluate our use of font and how we display it in order to make it more captivating for the audience.

One key aspect of the feedback was that the audio during the scene at the park is muffled and a bit hard to hear.  As a group we have agreed with this and therefore we need to find a time to re-shoot.  We have also decided that we may change the location of this scene in order to minimise other sounds that are beyond our control.

Feedback also suggests that we need to display the title earlier in the trailer in order to grab the audience’s attention from earlier on.  We also need to make sure that the release date is one of the last things that we see other than the credit block.

Our feedback in the change of music (previously mentioned) that the change in music wasn’t as effective as we originally thought.  It was also suggested that we need to add in different sound effects in order to make the trailer more exciting and gripping.

Overall the feedback was positive and they believed that it was a good trailer however it needs more ‘umph’, we believe that by taking on board this feedback we can get that.